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Production Week 10

 

Production Week 9

Feedback from first draft of short film

I have been able to create my first draft of my film and have been able to collect feedback from my teacher. She has told me to improve and recommended the following:

• Cut to the hands on the computer (POV)
• Camera behind the computers reflecting on my glasses 
• 
  Cut into shot of banging the computer (Zoom in)
• Close up hitting the computer 
• With the "Screens." title, take away the full stop
• Make the shots shorter but add a few zooms 
  
• When the lights go off make the ringing of the bell go at the same time 
• Reshoot the ringing of the bell
• Adding another shot of trying to open the small door 
• Another shot of opening the door handle 
• Walking shot to the glitched screens
• Audio levels need to be higher 
• Turn off the screens on the computer in the projector scenes 
• Scrap the next day title. Instead swap it with fade in and fade out 
• Cut off the scene of Harleen walking. Needs to not wobble 
• Audio when walking 
• Two shots matching so the opening of the small room door is smoother 
• Add a better ending:
• Instead of leaving it where the technician walks out. Instead have them both walk away and get locked in.  With a hand being projected in the background 
• Credits need to be shown

I will be taking on this feedback and make adjustments to my first draft. 

First draft

 

Production Week 8

Edit Decision List

 

SWOT of my offline edit

 

Offline edit

Rushes log

Shot No.	Location	Shot type	Angle	Movement	Duration	Sound notes	Description of character notes & action	Graphics	Props	Use/ disregard
1	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	15.3 seconds	Dialogue and computer beeps	Student is looking at the computer trying to complete work	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
1	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	14.2 seconds	Dialogue and computer beeps	Student is looking at the computer trying to complete work	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
1	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	24.1 seconds	Dialogue and computer beeps	Student is looking at the computer trying to complete work	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
1	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	28.9 seconds	Dialogue and computer beeps	Student is looking at the computer trying to complete work	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
1	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	53.3 seconds	Dialogue and computer beeps	Student is looking at the computer trying to complete work	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
2a	School	Close-up	Straight	Hand-Held	23.6 seconds	Dialogue	Student complaining and hits the screen	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
2b	School	Close-up	Straight	Hand-Held	15.1 seconds	Dialogue	Student complaining and hits the screen and continues to work	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
3	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	17.6 seconds	Dialogue	Student is looking at the computer trying to complete work and the screen fades to black	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
4	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	1 minute	Dialogue	Student is starting to finish working and lights go off	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
5a	School	Close-up	Straight	Hand-Held	15.1 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
5a	School	Close-up	Straight	Hand-Held	16.5 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
5b	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	18.2 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
5b	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	19.9 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
5b	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	18.4 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Disregard
5b	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	23.9 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard	Use
6	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	2 seconds	Dialogue	Bell rings	4k resolution	Bell	Use
5b	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	23.7 seconds	Dialogue	Student is worried but only for a little bit and starts to pack up	4k resolution	Computer screens and keyboard
7	School	Medium	Straight	Tripod	45.7 seconds	Dialogue	The student heads towards the door but realises that he’s locked in.	4k resolution	Door and wall display	Use
7	School	Medium	Straight	Tripod	30.1 seconds	Dialogue	The student heads towards the door but realises that he’s locked in.	4k resolution	Door and wall display	Disregard
8	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	18.7 seconds	Dialogue	The classroom screens are shown to be glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Disregard
8	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	14.6 seconds	Dialogue	The classroom screens are shown to be glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
9	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	16.9 seconds	Dialogue	The classroom screens are shown to be glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
9	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	5.1 seconds	Dialogue	The classroom screens are shown to be glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
9	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	24.4 seconds	Dialogue	The classroom screens are shown to be glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
9	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	20.8 seconds	Dialogue	The classroom screens are shown to be glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
10	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	34 seconds	Dialogue	Student enters the previous room to find his phone.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
10	School	Medium	Low	Hand-Held	9.9 seconds	Dialogue	Student enters the previous room to find his phone.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Disregard
11-12	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	11.6 seconds	Dialogue	Screens showing the student and others glitching out.	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
12	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	37.9 seconds	Dialogue	Students looks and see more screens glitching out	4k resolution	Screens, chairs and desks	Use
13	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	8 seconds	Dialogue	Student tries to escape but the project displays white screen.	4k resolution	Projector	Use
14	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	10.6 seconds	Dialogue	The projector shows text.	4k resolution	Projector	Use
15	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	20.6 seconds	Dialogue	The student figures out what the text says and apologies.	4k resolution	Projector	Use
15	School	Medium	Straight	Hand-Held	26.8 seconds	Dialogue	Student tries to escape but the project displays white screen.	4k resolution	Projector	Use
17a	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	24.8 seconds	Dialogue	Another student tries to open the door	4k resolution	Door	Use
17a	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	21.2 seconds	Dialogue	Another student tries to open the door	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
18	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	3.8 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Use
18	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	22.5 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
18	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	11.3 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Use
18	School	Short	Straight	Tripod	30.3 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
18	School	Short	Straight	Tripod	18.9 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
18	School	Short	Straight	Tripod	17.6 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
18	School	Short	Straight	Tripod	1.1 minutes	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
18	School	Short	Straight	Tripod	39.7 seconds	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Use
18	School	Short	Straight	Tripod	1.7 minutes	Dialogue	Student goes to the technician office and agrees to help	4k resolution	Door	Use
19	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	14.3 seconds	Dialogue	The student and teacher go towards the door and tries to unlock it	4k resolution	Door	Use
20	School	Short	Straight	Hand-Held	14.4 seconds	Dialogue	The student and teacher struggle to get the door open	4k resolution	Door	Disregard
20	Schooi	Short	Straight	Hand-Held	8.4 seconds	Dialogue	The student and teacher struggle to get the door open	4k resolution	Door handle	Use
21	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	16.6 seconds	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Disregard
21	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	25.8 seconds	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Disregard
21	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	47.3 seconds	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Disregard
21	Schooi	Long	Slanted	Hand-Held	4 minutes	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Use
21	School	Long	Straight	Tripod	3 minutes	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter and find the body	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Disregard
21	Schooi	Long	Straight	Tripod	1.8 minutes	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter and find the body	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Disregard
21	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	40.4 seconds	Dialogue	They get the door open and enter and find the body	4k resolution	Table, chairs, door	Use
22	School	Long	Straight	Hand-Held	6.9 seconds 9.2 seconds	Dialogue	As they enter the small room they discover the body	4k resolution	Dead body, metre stick	Use